Will you critique one of my songs? Lose Yourself

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  1. davidgunter

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    Lose Yourself
    words and music by David Gunter 3-22-2006



    G Em C D
    Here we are in this place.
    G Em C D
    Rich and poor. Sick and whole.

    C D G Em
    We're all the same. Like sheep have gone astray.
    C D Em
    You have to be lost to be found.

    G Em C D
    Here we are in this room.
    G Em C D
    Young and old. Foolish and wlse.

    C D G Em
    We're all the same. Saved by grace through faith.
    C D Em
    You have to be lost to be found.

    G Em C D
    Are you here tonight(today) lost and alone?
    G Em C D
    I tell the truth! You don’t have to be.

    C D G Em
    Lose yourself in the blood of Christ.
    C D Em
    You have to be lost to be found.

    C D G Em
    And if you’re saved lose yourself again.
    C D G Em
    Lose yourself in the blood of the Lamb.
    C D G Em
    Lose yourself in the Great I Am!
    C D Em
    You have to be lost to be found.


    ...Sorry the board messed the chord placement up. Don't guess it matters if you don't know the melody...
     
  2. TaterTot

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    looks nice. Wish I could hear the melody. Musically speaking, and this is opinion, it seems the song would be stronger if there were a bridge that used some borrowed chords or something other than the 4 chord pattern that runs throughout the song. Do you use guitar with this or keyboard?
     
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    There are only four chords in the song.
    The verse is (G Em C D G Em C D)
    but the chorus is (C D G Em C D Em)

    I play guitar.

    I was more curious as to what you thought of the lyrics.
     
  4. TaterTot

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    ok, sorry ~ I am a music teacher :)
    1)I think the lyrics are nice as they describe how we are on common ground, no matter our situations. What exactly does the phrase intend - "And if you’re saved lose yourself again. Lose yourself in the blood of the Lamb."...?

    2)It doesnt look like the chorus is uniform. It almost is, and maybe the tune unifies it.
    We're all the same. Like sheep have gone astray.You have to be lost to be found.
    We're all the same. Saved by grace through faith. You have to be lost to be found.
    Lose yourself in the blood of Christ. You have to be lost to be found.

    usually the chorus begins with the same phrase.
    Isnt songwriting fun? Its an act of worship in itself, and people who don't do it just dont understand. God bless you as you use your gifts for His honor!! And Keep it up!!
     
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    Put it up in MP3 if you record it. I'd love to hear it.
     
  7. TaterTot

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    oh, ok. I wasn't sure if it meant like - lose yourself so Christ can find you each day or lose yourself as in forgetting everything going on around you.
    I'd love to hear your song, too. Thanks for sharing it with us.
     

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